True Story of the murderer scene!

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Geekhellmc

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The story stated in a rainy night when a person called Maximum was playing a money game. When he lost he got so mad he killed the winner! Everytime he lose he killed someone until 1 day he got addicted to killing. He didn't get cought until he killed someone in the office but was camera secure. Police found him guilty and was thrown in jail for 6 years! Police knew that the prisoner had will kill more people. So what they did is that they put a poison activator in his body wich will activate if he kills someone. In the Temple, when there were tourists and Maximum was there, he somehow locked the exit and started killing. When he killed a person, the poison activated in his body and he had 360 sec left. He killed everyone but 1 teen boy. The boy was hiding behind the water fall and Maximum couldn't find him. 300 sec past, there was 60 sec left for him to survive but he started to feel the pain in his body, he was raging and crying! 60 sec past, Maximum fell on the floor and died while the teen boy ran and called the police for emergency help. End of story! Thank you for listening!
 
Cool story :D
 
thx GreenUprooter. Actually the idea came up after thinking why murderer dies 360 sec after game starts so it came up to my head :D
 
amazing story
 
The story is good and basic, but I don't like the flow. It's choppy and unnecessary, if you want to, I'd suggest adding more detail to your word flow, make it smooth and lit. I also noticed a few spelling errors in there.
 
Omg!!! Geekhell!!! :OOOO Speak to meh on skype bro!! (If u remember me) :O hi o/
Btw amaz- wait for it -ing story! :p
 
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