Herobrine's Revenge (the one you're SUPPOSED to see)

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I woke up from ear-splitting lightning from outside my window. The whole road woke up. The electricity was out and I was scared because I couldn't see a darn thing. I thought nothing isn't going to happen so I went downstairs and had breakfast (as it was nearly 8 am). Lights were still fused. After I had ate my breakfast, something unusual happened.

I went to the TV and saw a figure that looked like Steve from Minecraft but he has no pupils in his eyes. He took a step closer to me. I thought I recognised him but I was still unsure, then I found out.. it was Herobrine, the one and only phonemenon of Minecraft.

"Herobrine? You're back?!" I exclaimed at him. "Yes. I am one who can never die." He said in reply. In despair I quickly yelled, "Please don't kill me.." then Herobrine said in some Darth Vader voice, "ONLY GOD CAN SAVE YOU NOW." He leaped at me, and he leaped further than I expected him to (to be fair I didn't know he would leap at me anyway).

He jumped to the sofa like some crazy savage literally acting like a sausage (haha get it? k) Then I ran away like lightning outdoors, somehow hoping Herobrine would disappear. No, unfortunately I am quite unlucky. "I have come to take your soul of your inappitence of my castle of ruins," he said, even louder than the lightning still happening. He ran to me lightning fast and started to chase me out of the avenue.

I turned left, really confused of what was going on. Herobrine did too, no surprise there, and ran straight to where I was - the next road. As I hid in the leaves of the bushes, Herobrine looked around and straight away he saw me. I ran like wind for as long as I could cause I desperately didn't want to die at the age of 9. Those white eyes glowed like headlights.

He was chasing after me still and I didn't DARE looking behind me. I tried taking a u-turn to get back to the house. That failed, you probably guessed that. "GIVE ME YOUR SOUL OR I SHALL STRIKE LIGHTNING ON YOUR HEAD ANY SECOND NOW!" demanded Herobrine. I couldn't dare but even if I did, I would die anyway. Option 1 was give my soul to Herobrine and die. Option 2 was I don't give him my soul and die anyway. I can only die. I didn't give him my soul, so he striked me with lightning and I slowly perished away in the flames.

"MUHAHAHHAHAHHAHAHAHHHEHEHH&$*£&(*&"*($&$(£("$)(£_$()!!!!!" Herobrine crackled upon my death.
 
I woke up from ear-splitting lightning from outside my window. The whole road woke up. The electricity was out and I was scared because I couldn't see a darn thing. I thought nothing isn't going to happen so I went downstairs and had breakfast (as it was nearly 8 am). Lights were still fused. After I had ate my breakfast, something unusual happened.

I went to the TV and saw a figure that looked like Steve from Minecraft but he has no pupils in his eyes. He took a step closer to me. I thought I recognised him but I was still unsure, then I found out.. it was Herobrine, the one and only phonemenon of Minecraft.

"Herobrine? You're back?!" I exclaimed at him. "Yes. I am one who can never die." He said in reply. In despair I quickly yelled, "Please don't kill me.." then Herobrine said in some Darth Vader voice, "ONLY GOD CAN SAVE YOU NOW." He leaped at me, and he leaped further than I expected him to (to be fair I didn't know he would leap at me anyway).

He jumped to the sofa like some crazy savage literally acting like a sausage (haha get it? k) Then I ran away like lightning outdoors, somehow hoping Herobrine would disappear. No, unfortunately I am quite unlucky. "I have come to take your soul of your inappitence of my castle of ruins," he said, even louder than the lightning still happening. He ran to me lightning fast and started to chase me out of the avenue.

I turned left, really confused of what was going on. Herobrine did too, no surprise there, and ran straight to where I was - the next road. As I hid in the leaves of the bushes, Herobrine looked around and straight away he saw me. I ran like wind for as long as I could cause I desperately didn't want to die at the age of 9. Those white eyes glowed like headlights.

He was chasing after me still and I didn't DARE looking behind me. I tried taking a u-turn to get back to the house. That failed, you probably guessed that. "GIVE ME YOUR SOUL OR I SHALL STRIKE LIGHTNING ON YOUR HEAD ANY SECOND NOW!" demanded Herobrine. I couldn't dare but even if I did, I would die anyway. Option 1 was give my soul to Herobrine and die. Option 2 was I don't give him my soul and die anyway. I can only die. I didn't give him my soul, so he striked me with lightning and I slowly perished away in the flames.

"MUHAHAHHAHAHHAHAHAHHHEHEHH&$*£&(*&"*($&$(£("$)(£_$()!!!!!" Herobrine crackled upon my death.

Sorry if this is bad I am bad at writing stories :p
 
The whole road woke up.

I think you mean 'street'.

The electricity was out and I was scared because I couldn't see a darn thing.

How does the presence of lightning directly translate to a total blackout?

I thought nothing isn't going to happen

Double negative. Also, mixing up past tense and present tense.

so I went downstairs and had breakfast (as it was nearly 8 am). Lights were still fused.

If it was 8 am, you SHOULD have been able to see inside of your house because it was 8 IN THE MORNING. Lightning is also very rare at this time especially. But, in your favour, they are at their maximum power at this point in time.

After I had ate my breakfast, something unusual happened.

Cue The Ring's 'Coming Out of TV' Scene.

I went to the TV and saw a figure that looked like Steve from Minecraft but he has no pupils in his eyes. He took a step closer to me.

CUT! CUT!

I thought I recognised him but I was still unsure, then I found out.. it was Herobrine, the one and only phonemenon of Minecraft.

A phenomenon*(not phonemenon) is an occurrence which is observed to exist or happen. There are a lot of phenomenon in Minecraft, like Teamplayer being AFK 24/7. A phenomenon is not a person, Herobrine's appearance may be called a phenomenon but not himself. For that, you could've said something a little more appropriate. "The Haunting Spirit of Minecraft" for example or "The Mythical Herobrine", "The Eyeless One" etc. etc. Or you could've just gone and been overly dramatic and said "It was......HIM!"

"Herobrine? You're back?!" I exclaimed at him.

Apparently you've seen Herobrine before.

"Yes. I am one who can never die." He said in reply.

Herobrine does not understand Creepy 101.

In despair I quickly yelled, "Please don't kill me.."

Dot. Dot. Dot. No Exclamation Mark. Dot. Dot. Dot.

then Herobrine said in some Darth Vader voice, "ONLY GOD CAN SAVE YOU NOW."

no-pshhh-hshhhhh.jpg


He leaped at me, and he leaped further than I expected him to (to be fair I didn't know he would leap at me anyway).

You expected him to leap but you didn't know that he would leap.

He jumped to the sofa like some crazy savage literally acting like a sausage (haha get it? k)

Herobrine is now Boris the Animal.

I woke up from ear-splitting lightning from outside my window. The whole road woke up. The electricity was out and I was scared because I couldn't see a darn thing. I thought nothing isn't going to happen so I went downstairs and had breakfast (as it was nearly 8 am). Lights were still fused. After I had ate my breakfast, something unusual happened.

I went to the TV and saw a figure that looked like Steve from Minecraft but he has no pupils in his eyes. He took a step closer to me. I thought I recognised him but I was still unsure, then I found out.. it was Herobrine, the one and only phonemenon of Minecraft.

"Herobrine? You're back?!" I exclaimed at him. "Yes. I am one who can never die." He said in reply. In despair I quickly yelled, "Please don't kill me.." then Herobrine said in some Darth Vader voice, "ONLY GOD CAN SAVE YOU NOW." He leaped at me, and he leaped further than I expected him to (to be fair I didn't know he would leap at me anyway).

He jumped to the sofa like some crazy savage literally acting like a sausage (haha get it? k) Then I ran away like lightning outdoors, somehow hoping Herobrine would disappear. No, unfortunately I am quite unlucky. "I have come to take your soul of your inappitence of my castle of ruins," he said, even louder than the lightning still happening. He ran to me lightning fast and started to chase me out of the avenue.

I turned left, really confused of what was going on. Herobrine did too, no surprise there, and ran straight to where I was - the next road. As I hid in the leaves of the bushes, Herobrine looked around and straight away he saw me. I ran like wind for as long as I could cause I desperately didn't want to die at the age of 9. Those white eyes glowed like headlights.

He was chasing after me still and I didn't DARE looking behind me. I tried taking a u-turn to get back to the house. That failed, you probably guessed that. "GIVE ME YOUR SOUL OR I SHALL STRIKE LIGHTNING ON YOUR HEAD ANY SECOND NOW!" demanded Herobrine. I couldn't dare but even if I did, I would die anyway. Option 1 was give my soul to Herobrine and die. Option 2 was I don't give him my soul and die anyway. I can only die. I didn't give him my soul, so he striked me with lightning and I slowly perished away in the flames.

"MUHAHAHHAHAHHAHAHAHHHEHEHH&$*£&(*&"*($&$(£("$)(£_$()!!!!!" Herobrine crackled upon my death.

Dynam to Command! Lots of lightning here! Over!

Then I ran away like lightning outdoors, somehow hoping Herobrine would disappear.

So running away from someone means there's a chance of them disappearing from the world forever?

No, unfortunately I am quite unlucky.

Ohhhhhhh. So they CAN disappear forever but only if you're not unlucky.

"I have come to take your soul of your inappitence of my castle of ruins," he said

I'm sorry, what does "inappitence" mean? Wait. So your soul is from your "inappitence" but the "inappitence" belongs to his ruined castle? Is there something I'm missing?

even louder than the lightning still happening.

Your ears would've probably been bleeding by now.

He ran to me lightning fast and started to chase me out of the avenue.

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I turned left, really confused of what was going on. Herobrine did too, no surprise there, and ran straight to where I was - the next road.

Street. STREEEEEEEET.

As I hid in the leaves of the bushes, Herobrine looked around and straight away he saw me.

*rustle* *rustle*

I ran like wind for as long as I could

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cause I desperately didn't want to die at the age of 9.

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Herobrine is also a pedophile.

Those white eyes glowed like headlights.

Because headlights, of all things, glow.

He was chasing after me still and I didn't DARE looking behind me. I tried taking a u-turn to get back to the house. That failed, you probably guessed that.

I didn't guess the fact that you'd actually try to take a u-turn knowing that he's behind you.

"GIVE ME YOUR SOUL OR I SHALL STRIKE LIGHTNING ON YOUR HEAD ANY SECOND NOW!" demanded Herobrine.

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Option 1 was give my soul to Herobrine and die. Option 2 was I don't give him my soul and die anyway. I can only die.

This is Telltale's The Walking Dead all over again.

I didn't give him my soul, so he striked me with lightning and I slowly perished away in the flames.

You don't actually burst into flames. Your clothes would probably be blown off and you'd have cardiac arrest as well as your brain and nervous system being severely damaged since it hit your head.

"MUHAHAHHAHAHHAHAHAHHHEHEHH&$*£&(*&"*($&$(£("$)(£_$()!!!!!" Herobrine crackled upon my death.

How do you laugh in symbols?

"MUHAHAHHAHAHHAHAHAHHHEHEHH AMPERSAND DOLLAR SIGN ASTERISK EURO SIGN AMPERSAND OPENING BRACKET ASTERISK AMPERSAND SPEECH MARKS ASTERISK OPENING BRACKET DOLLAR SIGN AMPERSAND DOLLAR SIGN OPENING BRACKET EURO SIGN OPENING BRACKET SPEECH MARKS EURO SIGN OPENING BRACKET SPEECH MARKS DOLLAR SIGN CLOSING BRACKET OPENING BRACKET EURO SIGN UNDERSCORE DOLLAR SIGN OPENING BRACKET CLOSING BRACKET EXCLAMATION MARK EXCLAMATION MARK EXCLAMATION MARK EXCLAMATION MARK EXCLAMATION MARK ONE ONE ONE ONE ONE ONE ONE" he "crackled".




Well that was fun. You didn't take any offense to that, right?
 
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I think you mean 'street'.



How does the presence of lightning directly translate to a total blackout?



Double negative. Also, mixing up past tense and present tense.



If it was 8 am, you SHOULD have been able to see inside of your house because it was 8 IN THE MORNING. Lightning is also very rare at this time especially. But, in your favour, they are at their maximum power at this point in time.



Cue The Ring's 'Coming Out of TV' Scene.



CUT! CUT!



A phenomenon*(not phonemenon) is an occurrence which is observed to exist or happen. There are a lot of phenomenon in Minecraft, like Teamplayer being AFK 24/7. A phenomenon is not a person, Herobrine's appearance may be called a phenomenon but not himself. For that, you could've said something a little more appropriate. "The Haunting Spirit of Minecraft" for example or "The Mythical Herobrine", "The Eyeless One" etc. etc. Or you could've just gone and been overly dramatic and said "It was......HIM!"



Apparently you've seen Herobrine before.



Herobrine does not understand Creepy 101.



Dot. Dot. Dot. No Exclamation Mark. Dot. Dot. Dot.



no-pshhh-hshhhhh.jpg




You expected him to leap but you didn't know that he would leap.



Herobrine is now Boris the Animal.



Dynam to Command! Lots of lightning here! Over!



So running away from someone means there's a chance of them disappearing from the world forever?



Ohhhhhhh. So they CAN disappear forever but only if you're not unlucky.



I'm sorry, what does "inappitence" mean? Wait. So your soul is from your "inappitence" but the "inappitence" belongs to his ruined castle? Is there something I'm missing?



Your ears would've probably been bleeding by now.



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Street. STREEEEEEEET.



*rustle* *rustle*



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4522579-0769008203-tumbl.gif


Herobrine is also a pedophile.



Because headlights, of all things, glow.



I didn't guess the fact that you'd actually try to take a u-turn knowing that he's behind you.



mj762.jpg




This is Telltale's The Walking Dead all over again.



You don't actually burst into flames. Your clothes would probably be blown off and you'd have cardiac arrest as well as your brain and nervous system being severely damaged since it hit your head.



How do you laugh in symbols?

"MUHAHAHHAHAHHAHAHAHHHEHEHH AMPERSAND DOLLAR SIGN ASTERISK EURO SIGN AMPERSAND OPENING BRACKET ASTERISK AMPERSAND SPEECH MARKS ASTERISK OPENING BRACKET DOLLAR SIGN AMPERSAND DOLLAR SIGN OPENING BRACKET EURO SIGN OPENING BRACKET SPEECH MARKS EURO SIGN OPENING BRACKET SPEECH MARKS DOLLAR SIGN CLOSING BRACKET OPENING BRACKET EURO SIGN UNDERSCORE DOLLAR SIGN OPENING BRACKET CLOSING BRACKET EXCLAMATION MARK EXCLAMATION MARK EXCLAMATION MARK EXCLAMATION MARK EXCLAMATION MARK ONE ONE ONE ONE ONE ONE ONE" he "crackled".




Well that was fun. You didn't take any offense to that, right?
I literally told you it would be a bad story, right? XD
 
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