Story Ideas.

[Merp]

So if you didn't know I do love to write. I often don't share what I write because i'm shy about it but I have in the past few months stopped writing and I wish to get back into it but I have a few story ideas but I only really want to focus on one so i'm going to put the description down below of each. Than once you read them it would be great if you voted on the poll on which one I should really to write. The Spoiler Name is what the book is called.

Spoiler: Letters of Love

Faith Donaldson and Blaze Mills are two regular different people who live all the way across the country from each other. But when they get assigned to be each others pen pals. It started off simply just simple letters but eventually they fall in love. But their family and friends might tear their relationship apart. And are there secrets they are keeping from each other?

Spoiler: Playing with the Lights Off

Samantha Fergus is your basic popular cheerleader while Alex Kennedy is your typical bad boy. They just happened to be pared together for a project to get to know each other, but the two want nothing to do with each other because they know how things like this work. But something shocking Samantha discovers about Alex leads her into a place of danger and the unknown. Will Samantha make it out of this or will she fail at her project?

Spoiler: Fantasy Girl

Andrew Rivera is a typical football player who had everything until everything turned upside down. After receiving a concussion he keeps having this dream of this fantasy girl. Than one day when he believes he has gone insane his fantasy girl shows up in his real life. Now he must figure out what to make of this. Who is this fantasy girl and what does she want with Andrew Rivera?

 

[ClockworkFlips]

Personal opinions based on what I have:

Letters of Love:
Good idea, general enough description and has great potential, needs a bit more spice than just love though in my opinion. Just another love story isn't a lot to work with other than the basic storylines and stereotypes and such. Maybe throw in things like one has a significant other, or had, something else beyond just their love. Something to add tension I guess, 9.5/10

Playing with the Lights Off:
I personally don't like this one. The stakes aren't as high as Letters of Love, LoL (...no comment) has more emotional connection while this is a project, which to be completely honest, if you are working off the stereotype of a "basic popular cheerleader", chances are they won't really give the slightest **** (That ain't cursin', and if this is against the rules, then my intentions were crap ). This storyline just doesn't fit too well, it's a good start to a base of one though, 5/10

Fantasy Girl:
I actually wrote a story like this (I don't post my work here because it's too dark and mildly inappropriate for the general audience here), but just incase you are wondering, it's called "The Final Pause" and it's based off Clockwork, my fictional character who can stop time. Just felt like explaining a bit lol. I personally like this idea, I've even written based off something similar, and it really does have potential. I think it would be more interesting if the fantasy girl were there to... teach him things. Maybe he's mean to people, ignorant or something. Maybe this girl could be imaginary the entire time, which is more realistic, but he has visions of the girl, and those visions are actually the girl trying to teach him lessons that will improve him morally. This could also be really funny if she shows up in his head at school or in some public environment. 8/10

If this is too much or too critical, sorry, but I know that when I wrote a long time ago, and when I made posts like this, I really just wanted more feedback then "sounds cool!1!!1!", so I tried my best to give as much feedback as I could. This is all my own opinion. In the end, I like them in this order, if not visible via the scores I gave.

LoL
FG
PwtLO

Good luck writing, I can't say I'll read because I don't honestly have the time to doze off and read stories here anymore, but best of luck.
-Clockwork_

 

[SilverBlade]

Personal opinions based on what I have:

Letters of Love:
Good idea, general enough description and has great potential, needs a bit more spice than just love though in my opinion. Just another love story isn't a lot to work with other than the basic storylines and stereotypes and such. Maybe throw in things like one has a significant other, or had, something else beyond just their love. Something to add tension I guess, 9.5/10

Playing with the Lights Off:
I personally don't like this one. The stakes aren't as high as Letters of Love, LoL (...no comment) has more emotional connection while this is a project, which to be completely honest, if you are working off the stereotype of a "basic popular cheerleader", chances are they won't really give the slightest **** (That ain't cursin', and if this is against the rules, then my intentions were crap ). This storyline just doesn't fit too well, it's a good start to a base of one though, 5/10

Fantasy Girl:
I actually wrote a story like this (I don't post my work here because it's too dark and mildly inappropriate for the general audience here), but just incase you are wondering, it's called "The Final Pause" and it's based off Clockwork, my fictional character who can stop time. Just felt like explaining a bit lol. I personally like this idea, I've even written based off something similar, and it really does have potential. I think it would be more interesting if the fantasy girl were there to... teach him things. Maybe he's mean to people, ignorant or something. Maybe this girl could be imaginary the entire time, which is more realistic, but he has visions of the girl, and those visions are actually the girl trying to teach him lessons that will improve him morally. This could also be really funny if she shows up in his head at school or in some public environment. 8/10

If this is too much or too critical, sorry, but I know that when I wrote a long time ago, and when I made posts like this, I really just wanted more feedback then "sounds cool!1!!1!", so I tried my best to give as much feedback as I could. This is all my own opinion. In the end, I like them in this order, if not visible via the scores I gave.

LoL
FG
PwtLO

Good luck writing, I can't say I'll read because I don't honestly have the time to doze off and read stories here anymore, but best of luck.
-Clockwork_

I would love to read it some time, even though you can't post it on here, im weird ;p

 

[ClockworkFlips]

I would love to read it some time, even though you can't post it on here, im weird ;p

Thank you, there's nothing weird about that lol.

 

[Merp]

Personal opinions based on what I have:

Letters of Love:
Good idea, general enough description and has great potential, needs a bit more spice than just love though in my opinion. Just another love story isn't a lot to work with other than the basic storylines and stereotypes and such. Maybe throw in things like one has a significant other, or had, something else beyond just their love. Something to add tension I guess, 9.5/10

Playing with the Lights Off:
I personally don't like this one. The stakes aren't as high as Letters of Love, LoL (...no comment) has more emotional connection while this is a project, which to be completely honest, if you are working off the stereotype of a "basic popular cheerleader", chances are they won't really give the slightest **** (That ain't cursin', and if this is against the rules, then my intentions were crap ). This storyline just doesn't fit too well, it's a good start to a base of one though, 5/10

Fantasy Girl:
I actually wrote a story like this (I don't post my work here because it's too dark and mildly inappropriate for the general audience here), but just incase you are wondering, it's called "The Final Pause" and it's based off Clockwork, my fictional character who can stop time. Just felt like explaining a bit lol. I personally like this idea, I've even written based off something similar, and it really does have potential. I think it would be more interesting if the fantasy girl were there to... teach him things. Maybe he's mean to people, ignorant or something. Maybe this girl could be imaginary the entire time, which is more realistic, but he has visions of the girl, and those visions are actually the girl trying to teach him lessons that will improve him morally. This could also be really funny if she shows up in his head at school or in some public environment. 8/10

If this is too much or too critical, sorry, but I know that when I wrote a long time ago, and when I made posts like this, I really just wanted more feedback then "sounds cool!1!!1!", so I tried my best to give as much feedback as I could. This is all my own opinion. In the end, I like them in this order, if not visible via the scores I gave.

LoL
FG
PwtLO

Good luck writing, I can't say I'll read because I don't honestly have the time to doze off and read stories here anymore, but best of luck.
-Clockwork_

I don't mind the feedback! It was actually really nice! The descriptions were mostly just simply and kind of trying to tell you what its about if I were to do that one specific story I would put more into it and really try to make it come to life. But thanks for the feedback! It was much appreciated!