Do you like this for a story begining?

[Nerdehhh]

Idk I want to write a story and I asked some friends irl what it should be about. So with their information and feedback I have come to a conclusion. Tell me what you think! I can take hate so if you don't like it, say why Tbh I don't like it but x3

Fear. Fear is the one thing that separates us and defines us as people. Take the strongest person you know and throw him out the window because they just got replaced by my good friend fear. You start to do something you’re scared of but then comes fear walking in thinking he owns the place and pulls you back. Sometimes you defeat fear and turns out you love the thing you were scared of, or things go terribly and it turns out you hate it but that’s different.

 

[HuskyInAHat]

Idk I want to write a story and I asked some friends irl what it should be about. So with their information and feedback I have come to a conclusion. Tell me what you think! I can take hate so if you don't like it, say why Tbh I don't like it but x3

Fear. Fear is the one thing that separates us and defines us as people. Take the strongest person you know and throw him out the window because they just got replaced by my good friend fear. You start to do something you’re scared of but then comes fear walking in thinking he owns the place and pulls you back. Sometimes you defeat fear and turns out you love the thing you were scared of, or things go terribly and it turns out you hate it but that’s different.

This is a good start to a great story! ;3 If this is in the mind of a sarcastic/joking person it is told very well, but in the mind of a serious person I'd say try replacing "Take the strongest person and 'throw them out the window'..." with something a little more serious and now much joke-ish. But it is a very good start and I hope you make more! ;3