a story i've been working on for a while (unnamed)

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Arujann

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I have been working on writing this story off and on since last December. I have put a lot of my time and effort into writing it, and I hope that comes through. So basically, the premises of this story is a combination of my modern life and my family's historical life. The time period for this is from my character's birth, November 16th, 1927 to my character's death somewhere in the late 2010s. I will just give you the prologue to the story because i feel the most confident about that. I will add chapters if I get enough support for the story. I apologize in advance for any spelling/grammatical errors (I used Google Translate for a bit of it since my typing English isn't great), since English is not my first language. If anyone doesn't know, which you most likely don't- my family is from Belarus. I did a lot of researching to write this story, I contacted some of my family members that still live there to explain what they went through during their life. I hope you like my story..

prologue:
I hear death. I breathe death and I see death. All around me is death. My insides are death. Death has given me so much yet taken away so much simultaneously. Death has given me a new life. A life empty of everything. I have yet to succumb to death, though. My mind goes numb when I think of the moment that death comes and takes everything away from me again like it did so many years ago. My fingertips trembled, grasping the pencil in them- giving them so much strain. Finally, my fingers went limp. There was something beautiful about watching my own body give in. My nose was still cherry red from the harsh Russian winter going on outside, and my cheeks were that beautiful rosy pink color. The color of the sunset right before the world turns into an endless void, as far as the eye can see. In a split second, all of that color and vibrance was flushed out of my tired face. My cheeks turned to more of the color of a pink rose after a forest fire. My mouth slowly curled into a smile before I left. In reality, I’ve been dead for a long, long time. Since my body has finally caught up with my mind, I’ll tell you my story.

{other chapters will appear in the different pages, not on this one.}
i give credit to the following people:
my grandmother, Tatiana Vladislav (Gomel, Belarus)
my great uncle, Yevgeni Vladislav (Vyetka, Belarus)
my great grandmother, Polina Kuznetsov's family autobiography (r.i.p)

chapter 1 part 1/2: page 1
chapter 1 part 3/4: page 2

 
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with mcr coming back and this i can feel the emoness crawling into my soul
 
(This part has references to the holocaust and Nazi Germany, if it offends you i suggest you don't continue reading on. Nazi Germany is only referred to because it's a significant part of my family's history. A bit of graphic imagery is displayed, if that offends you as well- please do not continue on. My book is meant for a slightly more mature audience. None of my writing is set out to offend anyone at all. Thank you.)

Chapter 1 (Part 1)
I was young. 14 years old to be exact. Salty tears dripped down my cheeks, a cloud of dust came out of my mouth as I coughed and settled onto the cold stone floor. We hid in that basement for what felt like an eternity. Manslaughter was happening fifteen feet above us and we all pretended that we didn’t know and that everything was normal, but in reality- we all knew what was going on in the outside world. We were too scared to say anything about it though, in fear of invoking panic in each other. Dead bodies strewn the streets and bullet shells scattered the barren, scorched earth. Every waking moment, more children were left orphaned and more wives were left widowed. The war consumed everyone and everything. My ears constantly rang with the sound of artillery fire. My body was frail. Bruises and scrapes covered me from head to toe. My family and I went through a lot during that month in the basement. We had no idea what went on our home above us. Our voices were drowned out by the sound of the German war machine triumphantly plowing through the Soviet countryside above. Our proud brothers bravely fought to protect our city, Smolensk, from the Nazi invaders- to no prevail.

Early July to Early August. 1941 were some of the hardest days of my life. That month was the longest span of time I could’ve ever imagined. Every waking moment I feared that I wouldn’t make it another day. As the month drew to a close, the sound of the Panzers could be heard heading East. They made gains quickly. The sight of the Panzers shocked us all at the beginning of that long month. Our Soviet army was unstoppable, we outnumbered the Nazis in everything. We learned quickly that the Nazis were not a force to be reckoned with. They shattered our defenses around the city and crushed the Soviet opposition. The Nazis pushed hard into Smolensk. Our beloved city had been cast over by the cloud of the German Reich and Operation Barbarossa.

The air smelled of gunpowder and something strange after the battle. That strange smell will never leave me. The smell of burning human flesh is one that will haunt you for the remainder of your days. The smell of someone’s skin being burnt off while they’re still alive fogs your thoughts and sends chills down your spine. Never will I forget that smell.

Ash covered tanks, dead Soviet soldiers, and the ruins of our neighbor’s houses littered the once lively, cobblestone streets of Smolensk. Nazi occupation was harsh. They were strict and punished for everything. Whippings and live executions were visible from our home every day, and I can assure you- they were definitely supposed to be watched. The Nazis were cruel in that way, they purposely forced us to watch our friends, family, and neighbors being burnt alive or whipped until their backs were completely covered in blood. The first time I witnessed that, I closed my eyes in dismay- not really knowing how to respond or how to react to the atrocities in front of me.

As the Nazi occupation continued on, I got used to it. I got used to the deafening sound of people crying out in agony. I got used to the sound of artillery fire in the distance. I got used to the sight of thousands of Soviet prisoners, jews, and gypsies being marched through the city centre. My iridescent gray eyes peered through the curtains of our window as the prisoners were being marched who knows where.

(end of Chapter 1 Part 1: I will add more in two days.)
 
Agreeing with Rena, never have I ever been so intrigued in a story and more involved. When I'm reading I can actually picture what is trying to be displayed in the story and it's great. cx
 
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Chapter 1 part 2
People really underestimate the Russian summers. The temperatures grow blistering hot and the humidity gets out of control. Western Russia is not the ideal place to fight at all. Even with our home advantage, the Soviet Army was struggling. We lost nearly every battle. Leningrad was being sieged, Kyiv and Minsk had fallen early on in the war, and the Germans were steadily marching towards Moscow.

During one of those hot summer days in Smolensk, there was another prisoner march. This time it was all Soviet prisoners of war, soldiers that had been fighting in the East. I glanced out my window at the thousands of them being paraded down the streets. Their eyes were glazed over, those sorrowful eyes pleaded with me to help them. I could do nothing but sit there and watch.

The next thing that happened that day, I can still remember. As clear as that summer sky. One of the soldiers glanced at me. I couldn’t put a face to that soldier. He had a broken leg and he was covered in ash. It finally dawned on me that that soldier was my brother. I could do nothing but sit there and watch. He was sent to defend Moscow against the Germans about six months ago. Him and I made eye contact and his eyes pleaded with me to run out there and help him. I could do nothing, and even with that I still regret not trying to do something that day. You’ll hear more about my brother later on in my story.

Days went by and my life got harder. The Germans starved us. They took the farmland around the city and used the grain created by it to feed the soldiers in the east. We resorted to the worst. We ate the flesh of the tall cedar trees that lined the outskirts of the city. We would take night trips to go and gather the trees, and that became a daily occurrence. Our bodies were small and weak. All of my life had been starvation and injustice under Stalin’s rule, it was no better under Hitler’s. In fact, it was exactly the same. During those nights of gathering basically anything we found that was edible, I would draw away from the group. It was dangerous, but I was quiet. I crept through the tall cedars and would rest on the trunk of a toppled one. I would sit there and be thankful. I would be thankful that I wasn’t drawn to fight in the war. I would be thankful that I didn’t have to be sent to where the prisoners were being sent. I would be thankful that I was still on this cruel place that we call our planet. I cried every night.

I sat on that log many nights, chewing on a piece of the cedar’s flesh. It was soft, and it smelled of Christmas. Oh how I miss Christmas. The Nazis banned the celebration when they took over a year ago.

In my left ear, there was a vibration- a rumble. I thought nothing of it since I had been hearing rumbling noises for the past year and a half that the war had been going on. As I sat there and bathed in my own innocence, I heard the most frightening noise I had ever heard in my young life. That noise haunts my dreams and rings like a church bell in my head. It was a child. Not younger than 5 but not older than 10, screaming at the top of their lungs. I ducked behind the cedar log and tried to locate the source of the scream. Footsteps rang through the ground. Not one pair of footsteps, many. About 5 or 6, I can’t really remember. As I listened, the footsteps got closer and louder. Closer and louder. Closer and louder until finally, it felt as they were right on top of me.
{I will update in two days}
 
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i REALLY LIKE THIS PLEASE i thrive off of this
 
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So deep and grasping o.o this is amazing, Sam❤️ I want more!
 
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